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Post by Aquablast on Mar 18, 2015 20:45:43 GMT -5
This essay is on Macbeth and is due next Monday. (My teacher told us about it today.) This is my first two body paragraphs.
Unlike his later murders, Macbeth shows some remorse in the murder of King Duncan. When the witches first told Macbeth their predictions, Macbeth thought that they were lying to him. However after the witches were right about that Macbeth would become the Thane of Cawdor, he started to believe in the witch's prophecy. Macbeth decided to kill King Duncan, because Lady Macbeth taunting him to kill the king. After killing King Duncan, Macbeth felt awful about betraying his king. "[Looking at his hands] This is a sorry sight." (Act 2, Scene 2) Macbeth could not say amen that night when he was praying. The murder of King Duncan caused Macbeth to start losing his mind.
However, Macbeth's attitude changes when he plots the murder of Banquo and Fleance. The witches told Macbeth and Banquo that Banquo's son shall become king. Macbeth did not want to lose his throne after everything he sacrifice to become the King of Scotland. In Act 3, Macbeth and Lady Macbeth seems to have swap roles. Unlike in the murder of King Duncan, Lady Macbeth told Macbeth not to kill Banquo. Macbeth ignored his wife and hired three murderers to kill Banquo and Fleance. "Both of you know Banquo was your enemy." (Act 3, Scene 1) The murderers killed Banquo, but Fleance escaped the murderers. Macbeth tries to act like Banquo's death did not affect him; however, Macbeth saw the ghost of Banquo at dinner. Macbeth was the only one who was able to see Banquo's ghost. Lady Macbeth tried to tell their guests that Macbeth have an illness and that why he is acting a little crazy. Macbeth is losing even more of his sanity in Act 3.
I will add the third when I am done with it. I need help improving the grammar in this essay.
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Post by Draconaitr25 on Mar 18, 2015 21:29:32 GMT -5
Before anything, English is not my native language. I'm just here to help so feel free to correct me. I believe there is a "," in the first "however" (line 2). Take out the "," in line 3: "Macbeth decided to kill King Duncan, because..." The "." before the quotation is unnecesary IMO. Second Paragraph: change: "the ghost of Banquo" for "Banquo's ghost (sounds better). That's is all I could see. If you want to improve your essay, which is different from grammar correction. Feel free to ask me
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Post by Aquablast on Mar 19, 2015 17:11:49 GMT -5
Thank you, and you have any suggestions to help me with the writing of the essay please share them with me. Thank you! Here is paragraph 3 The most brutal and senseless of all the murders is the murder of Macduff's family. Macbeth found out from the witches that Macduff was going to become a threat to Macbeth. Macbeth decided to hire someone to kill Macduff's son and wife. The murder of Macduff's family was senseless. Macduff's family was innocent, and Macbeth seemed to killed them because he could. Macbeth stated that he would kill Macduff's family when he said "Time, thou anticipat'st my dread exploits: the flighty purpose never is o'ertook unless the deed go with it. From this moment the very firstlings of my heart shall be the firstlings of my hand. And even now, to crown my thoughts with acts, be it thought and done: The castle of Macduff I will surprise; seize upon Fife; give to th' edge o' th' sword his wife, his babes, and all unfortunate souls that trace him in his lines. No boasting like a fool; this deed I'll do before this purpose cool: But no more sights!- Where are these gentlemen? Come, bring me where they are." (Act 4, Scene 1) Macbeth is now murdering innocent people who are not a harm to him.
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Post by Draconaitr25 on Mar 20, 2015 17:13:07 GMT -5
Thank you, and you have any suggestions to help me with the writing of the essay please share them with me. Thank you! Here is paragraph 3 The most brutal and senseless of all the murders is the murder of Macduff's family. Macbeth found out from the witches that Macduff was going to become a threat to Macbeth. Macbeth decided to hire someone to kill Macduff's son and wife. The murder of Macduff's family was senseless. Macduff's family was innocent, and Macbeth seemed to killed them because he could. Macbeth stated that he would kill Macduff's family when he said "Time, thou anticipat'st my dread exploits: the flighty purpose never is o'ertook unless the deed go with it. From this moment the very firstlings of my heart shall be the firstlings of my hand. And even now, to crown my thoughts with acts, be it thought and done: The castle of Macduff I will surprise; seize upon Fife; give to th' edge o' th' sword his wife, his babes, and all unfortunate souls that trace him in his lines. No boasting like a fool; this deed I'll do before this purpose cool: But no more sights!- Where are these gentlemen? Come, bring me where they are." (Act 4, Scene 1) Macbeth is now murdering innocent people who are not a harm to him. Okay, here I go. Blue = Check (I would have added Red to every detail I put but I did it on word and the colors did not pass sorry. Unlike his previous murders, Macbeth shows some remorse in the murder of his King, Duncan. The first time the witches told about Macbeth's predictions, he was uncertain and confused. However after the witches. First prediction became true, (I deleted the sentence as I thought it was unnecessary for an essay) Macbeth gradually began to believe in the witches prophecies. Therefore, Macbeth along with his wife’s persuasion and assistance decided to kill King Duncan on his own castle. After killing King Duncan, Macbeth felt as a traitor, betraying his own king, for ambition and power. "[Looking at his hands] This is a sorry sight." (Act 2, Scene 2). Macbeth could not say amen that night when he was praying. The results of his treason, of murdering of King Duncan affected him and his wife, as it can be seen in the acts to come. However, Macbeth's attitude changes when he plots secretly the murder of Banquo and his son, Fleance. The witches told Macbeth and Banquo that Banquo's son shall become king. Macbeth wanted to prevent such happening, for he did not wanted a fruitless crown upon his head after the sacrifices and unimaginable deeds, to become King of Scotland. In Act 3, there seems to be a swap between Macbeth and Lady Macbeth’s behavior and thoughts. !!Unlike in the murder of King Duncan, Lady Macbeth told Macbeth not to kill Banquo.!! (I am actually not sure if she said something like that. I thought Lady Macbeth didn’t know in the first place so please CHECK) Macbeth ignored his wife (And this too) and hired three murderers to kill Banquo and Fleance. "Both of you know Banquo was your enemy." (Act 3, Scene 1) The day before the toast, the murderers killed Banquo, however Fleance escaped the murderers and the prophecies remained unchanged. Macbeth believed Banquo's death would not affect him; although that was not the case. In Macbeth’s reunion with the lords, he was the only one capable of seeing Banquo’s ghost. At this moment of the play, Macbeth’s madness became clear to the audience, though Lady Macbeth tried to convince their guests that Macbeth had an illness to explain why he was hallucinating. It can be seen that Macbeth was losing his sanity even more in the next Act 3. Macbeth, after visiting the witches he found out that Macduff was going to become a threat to him and his kingdom. In addition, Macbeth hired a murderer to kill Macduff's son and wife. It was so far the most brutal, senseless and unnecessary of all the murders. Macduff's family was innocent despite Macduff’s intentions, nevertheless Macbeth seemed to kill them because he could. It could be seen that Macbeth stated that he would kill Macduff's family when he said "Time, thou anticipat'st my dread exploits: the flighty purpose never is o'ertook unless the deed go with it. From this moment the very firstlings of my heart shall be the firstlings of my hand. And even now, to crown my thoughts with acts, be it thought and done: The castle of Macduff I will surprise; seize upon Fife; give to th' edge o' th' sword his wife, his babes, and all unfortunate souls that trace him in his lines. No boasting like a fool; this deed I'll do before this purpose cool: But no more sights!- Where are these gentlemen? Come, bring me where they are." (Act 4, Scene 1). Macbeth’s ambition and power turned him to a tyrant, murdering anyone whom might be a thread to secure his crown. Even the innocent ones who are not a harm to him.
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Post by Aquablast on Mar 22, 2015 19:15:33 GMT -5
I remove the part you had in Blue. Thank you for the help pal!
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Post by Draconaitr25 on Mar 22, 2015 20:55:25 GMT -5
I remove the part you had in Blue. Thank you for the help pal! I got your back homie.
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Post by Aquablast on Apr 13, 2015 12:00:42 GMT -5
I got a good grade on the paper. Thank you for the help!
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Post by Draconaitr25 on Apr 13, 2015 13:26:21 GMT -5
U did? That's great. Let me know the mark if possible
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